Thursday, April 17, 2014

NestPitch BP8: Circle of Fur

Category/Genre: Adult Women's Fiction

Word Count: 77,000

Pitch: In each chapter a fur coat passes from hand to hand. Funny, sentimental, sometimes dark, each one contains a stand-alone story connected to the previous one, until the fur coat returns to its original owner. 

If the MC were an Easter Egg, what flavor would they be and why?

I am Molly Henderson, widow of Bill. If I were an Easter Egg, which is a daft idea if ever I heard one, I would be delivered in a plain box.

Excerpt: (300 words)

Going to the school dance had been a terrible idea, but Betty Herbert’s mother had insisted.

“You can’t miss your final year Prom,” she’d said, horrified. “It’s a memory you’ll always treasure.” 

Betty wondered which parallel universe her mother inhabited. It must have been one where her teenage daughter was popular and clever, the centre of a happy crowd of girlfriends who discussed clothes and make-up and boys. A daughter who’d recall her own schooldays as riotous fun, as her mother seemed to.

Mrs Herbert herself had a thick album of memories: concert programmes, restaurant menus and photographs all carefully stuck in a scrap book and she fully expected her daughter to have the same one day, if she’d only make the effort to smile a bit more. 

The thought of going to a dance, any dance, gave Betty a sick feeling of pure fear. Fat girls didn’t dance. 

“I don’t want to go, Mum, and anyway I haven’t anything to wear.”

“Ah, that’s where you’re wrong. I’ve made you a lovely little frock as a surprise.”

Her heart sank. Her mother was an ardent seamstress and loved making her daughter frocks. These were always totally unsuitable for a gloomy, overweight teenager with greasy hair, fighting a losing battle against bad skin.  Betty would have preferred a tent of inconspicuous beige, one with properties to render her invisible until she became thin as a stick and looked more like Kate Bush.

“Look, it’s hanging up in the spare room. I finished it just last night. Ta-da!”

Mrs Herbert stood aside and let her little surprise speak for itself.
It shouted. Suckered again, Betty!

9 comments:

  1. Laptop Bunny leaves 1 dozen nougat filled chocolate eggs (Q, 25 pp, Syn)

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    1. Am enjoying those nougat filled eggs! My favourite! Does Q25 pp Syn, translate into your wanting to read 25 pages and have the full synopsis? I can send you that, just say where and when! Cheers Ginny

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    2. Hi, Ginny! You'll be receive an email in a day or two that outlines what you need to send where. Also, keep an eye on the NestPitch blog for updates! Congratulations on your requests! http://nestpitch.wordpress.com

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  2. Choc egg basket

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  3. Would love to read more! Intrigued already from this small excerpt. So topical and would appeal to all ages.

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  4. What a great premise! I really enjoyed this snippet and would definitely want to read on ;)

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  5. Sounds like a fascinating read. Enjoyed the short excerpt and could quite easily get immersed in this book.

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  6. I want to know what happens next. Soon!

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  7. I want to know what happens next. Soon!

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